Looking through the window I see a face,
Inviting me, guiding me, to the soft embrace.
The face is near and yet veiled,
behind a fog only I can see.
With each step the veil dissolves,
Into the air it was made from.
The fog in the air and the cold night,
propel me, thwart me, through my life.
The closer I get the more I see,
yet cannot see what will be.
The laden feet do not know what waits,
yet they move to know their fate.
Whichever way she looks at me,
I now need to see her face.
6 comments:
The poet has very cleverly disguised the readers with the apt use of symbolism and metaphor and personification .The poet seems to be magnetically drawn toward the strange face . The desire to unveil the face is strong that in the last line he clearly says that he needs to see her face . The reader is left wondering who the her stands for ? The poet manages to pave the path for the guesses . Is she some one who resides in the heart of the poet and the he wants to recognize her importance in his life or it is God to whom he wants to point out . It may also be pointing to – Death , the ultimate destination or something else . The poet only can tell . However the language seems to be pointing towards death which seems lovely, dark and deep but sometimes it also feels that he may be talking of time or success. so overall it is a great confusion and that is what a poetry is meant for . So the poet is successful in his attempt to arouse curiosity in readers . Following lines of a famous poet haunted me while reading the poem
“life is a bubble
Entangled with thorns and troubles
In life’s forest we wander lonely as a cloud.
Where it takes the shape or form of a cloud
Variety is the spice of life.”
Wonderful work keep it up (and tell who she is ?)
z
Thanks for the compliments. I don't get them often. :)
Regarding the question, I myself don't know who the face belongs to. But the question is, would I have given the name had I known? Would my reply be any different then? I am just wondering. ;)
Hello Dear
Arre I had made so many guesses i just wanted to know which one is right or may be it is not even included in the list . Well how can u say "I dont know", u must have something in ur mind or some imagination na , before writing .Yes,The reply might b different based on the context if u had given the name(but in that case it my not b as effective so let it b) ) secondly if u had known u would only have been asked to explain what u intent to say . Well u need not to wonder over such a small issue as many wonderful and good things are stored for you for your future ahead .
Have a God blessed Life
I see a vision in your poem. Best of luck
Shaleen
great wat a crap in the name of poem
and superfluous people praised it like anything .
The face is veiled than how it be dissolved? is it made of ice ? u went close and still cudn't see ? wats this nonsense
@Anonymous
Thanks for the criticism. I really appreciate your views but please refrain from making personal attacks. Just because of you, I am going to stop anonymous comments.
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